Fly!Penguin!

kirafukirafu Member, PRO Posts: 314

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  • RPRP Member Posts: 1,990
    Good luck on the game.

    I saw the homepage an saw the english description. You may want to have it edited to make it clear and understandable.

    "Huh? Penguin is birds do? Then why not fly?"
    "What? Penguins's hometown in Antarctica ? Then how do I not seen it?"

    That is going to cause confusion for any english customers/gamers.

    If you want some help or suggestions with the description I'm sure we can lend a hand here in the forums. For an example you could change it to:


    "You need to get to the Penguin hometown in Antarctica, but it is too far to walk and too far to swim! Wait! Penguins are birds are they not? Then why not fly?!"

  • kirafukirafu Member, PRO Posts: 314
    thanks !! very very thanks,
    My english is very pool,
    this description is use google translation,
    This is very useful suggestions
    Thank you very much!
  • kirafukirafu Member, PRO Posts: 314
    I change description,
    Tonight to make demo video,
    Thanks again
  • kirafukirafu Member, PRO Posts: 314


    trailer demo video Release!
    this version a bit rough.
    But enough to see the game the way the operation^^
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    実際のゲームプレイデモムービーリリース!

    しかし、ゲーム遊ぶ実際の状況を表示^^"
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    遊戲實際遊玩的demo影片緊急發佈!

    剪接的有點粗糙,但是應該足夠看出實際遊戲的操作方式^^"
  • PBEmpirePBEmpire Member Posts: 676
    Looks good!
  • kinzuakinzua Member Posts: 554
    Nice stuff there. Good luck at the app store.
  • BoomshackBarryBoomshackBarry Member Posts: 712
    That's a fantastic looking game, really professional :D

    Taking a lead from what @RP was saying though I think it would be a huge benefit to you to collaborate with a fluent English proof reader, as most of the text really needs looking at, especially the frequent use of the word 'Traver', I'm fairly certain that isn't an English word. In all honesty I've found out many times that Google translate is only useful for very short phrases.

    If I might offer to point you in the right direction, our very own @tatiang offers such a proof reading service at a very reasonable rate, you can see the details at the link below; I'd strongly suggest getting in touch with him.

    https://forums.gamesalad.com/discussion/53274/proofreader-available

    Again it's a great looking game, good luck with it :)
  • kirafukirafu Member, PRO Posts: 314
    @PBEmpire & @kinzua
    Thanks!Very happy to read your comments!

    @BoomshackBarry
    Thank you, this is a good suggestion, I will try to do it,
    I will begin as soon as Improve English description!
    And seek the assistance of relevant ^^"

    If anybody have any comments or questions please let me know.
    Thank you everybody!
    i Love you! guys!
  • Braydon_SFXBraydon_SFX Member, Sous Chef, Bowlboy Sidekick Posts: 9,273
    Excellent for your very first application. Hope it does well!
  • kirafukirafu Member, PRO Posts: 314


    trailer demo video v2 Release!
    I Improve English description!
  • kirafukirafu Member, PRO Posts: 314
    "Fly!Penguin!"ready for sale! now in the appstore,0.99$!
    Check it out at
    https://itunes.apple.com/us/app/fly!penguin!/id633260168?ls=1&mt=8
  • HalfBakedProductionsHalfBakedProductions Member, PRO Posts: 248
    Wow, the graphics are amazing!
  • BazookaTimeBazookaTime Member Posts: 1,274
    Looks really good, I will have to check it out.
  • BazookaTimeBazookaTime Member Posts: 1,274
    Picked this up and it is very good. My problem with these types of games is how controlled the distances are at the start but all in all this is very polished.
  • kirafukirafu Member, PRO Posts: 314
    edited June 2013
    I am very troubled in the United States how to promote,
    The game has been completed for some time,
    I know that some sites,forum in Asia,
    But I know nothing about the United States ><

    I believe that the game is without borders
    "Fly!Penguin" has no language problems,
    Fly! Penguin! Can beat Angry Birds times.at Taiwan.
    http://kirafugames.blogspot.tw/2013/06/0021-flypenguin.html#more
    So "Fly!Penguin" it should be very interesting game.
    but downloads pitiful,"Fly!Penguin" in United States O_Q

    App Store
    https://itunes.apple.com/us/app/fly!penguin!/id633260168?ls=1&mt=8

    Please help me O_Q
    Or give me some advice,What shall I do, what can i done?
    *Taiwan is veay small Island
  • BazookaTimeBazookaTime Member Posts: 1,274
    Your game is actually very good, very polished. I think the App Store is so crowded that it is very hard to get a game noticed. I will make sure to leave a review for you.
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