★★★ Little Laura: The Mystery on the appstore ★★★
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Hello friends! expected adventure game is already on the appstore, I hope your help Thanks
http://itunes.apple.com/us/app/little-laura-the-mystery/id462242118?l=es&ls=1&mt=8
http://itunes.apple.com/us/app/little-laura-the-mystery/id462242118?l=es&ls=1&mt=8
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Main features
HD graphics that squeeze the most out of your iPhone display retina.
Find keys, solve puzzles, find hidden objects and much more!
Use headphones for greater experience.
All this and much more in Little Laura: The Mystery
http://itunes.apple.com/us/app/little-laura-the-mystery/id462242118?l=es&ls=1&mt=8
Good luck with this. I'm working on an adventure too so would be great to know how sales are.
One very important point though - the description translation to English in the app store is terrible! It'll definitely put people off buying your game. Hopefully your in-game translation is better.
I've quickly rewritten it for you. I strongly recommend you use this rewrite of get someone else to look at it for you:
In the middle of the night Laura is awoken by voices. Her parents have disappeared, only their memories remain.
Laura is determined to find out what has happened to them – and will now embark on a life changing adventure.
But Laura is not alone - a detective named Gabel will help her on the journey, but in return Laura must help Gabel to solve a series of puzzles and riddles.
Can Laura discover what has happened to her family? Are you ready to help her on the adventure?...
In the middle of the night Laura is awoken by voices. Her parents have disappeared, only their memories remain.
Laura is determined to find out what has happened to them – and will now embark on a life changing adventure.
But Laura is not alone - a detective named Gabel will help her on the journey, but in return Laura must help Gabel to solve a series of puzzles and riddles.
Can Laura discover what has happened to her family? Are you ready to help her on the adventure?...
At the moment your Images are good, your icon is poor and your text is a disaster. It seems such a shame to mess up at this stage when the potential for a real success is there (I'm assuming it plays as good as it looks).
[[ I edited your post to be a *little* less offensive, and I've merged your two posts into one as they had exactly the same title! - Cheers, QS
I do not understand you need to do to appear in the Highlights section in the appstore, I understand that you said that the translation is bad but I've changed, and in my country the translation is perfect game is in 2 languages.